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Author's Note: I'm not well in english, so there could be some mistakes. Please don't type rude comments. Also this is my very first reader-insert. Give this noobie some slack.

Disclaimer: Hetalia characters; France,Spain, prussia and 2pGermany.You...etc
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Inside a large moving box, a (fur color) mother feline and her 5 litter of kittens were struggling to keep warm from the pounding rain and roaring thunder.

"Mama...We're so cold...", said one of the (same f/c) twin kitten, René.
"And hungry...", finished the other twin with white fur and (same e/c), joliee.

You looked down at you're kittens with a melancholy face. They were trying to keep warm by snuggling you till they were practical under you're stomach, but it still wasn't enough for them. It didn't help that hadn't eaten for a couple days. You could actually see a peek of there bones. You couldn't help it, you're eyes began to water. You couldn't do anything more for you're babies. Leaving them here to find food wasn't an option, the rats hiding behind the trash cans were starving and by the way they eyed you're kittens.NOT GONNA HAPPEN.

Achoo-o!

Snapping you out from you're thoughts, you looked beneath you're chin to see you're smallest baby, the runt of the litter, Finnian. He had the most  beautiful blue eyes that outshine even the most star-filled midnight sky, unlike his older brothers and sisters, he didn't have long fur or one colored fur. Instead his fur short and had white fur with (f/c) fur on each end of his paws and on the tip of his tail. "The poor dear, he won't be able to survive this weather!", you thought and started to panic. "I have to find better shelter!", you told you're self. You faced you're children.

"Children! Please! Wake up! ", you pleaded.

At the same time all the kittens shot their heads up.

"Yes mother!(ma merè!)*", they said.

You gave a determined yet weak smile," I know you all are fatigued and cold but we have to find a better place"

" where will we go? Ma merè", asked Claude, the oldest.

" I don't know but we can't stay here, you're younger brother won't be able to take this an longer, here is what we'll do,".

~<Le magical time skip>~

"You can't get away from me!"

You and you're children were running for you're lives. When crossing the bridge  that separates the high class mansion from the middle class homes, you and you're kids encountered a very disturbed German shepherd**.

" C'mn fräulein! I won't bite! Ahahaha!".  

You and kids dashed around a corner. You quickly gave you're oldest son, Claude, Finnian to hold. Claude gave you a questioned look.

" listen to me carefully, I want you all to run ahead of me, find a home that smells of cinnamin, sausage and wine***  in one place. I will stay behind   And hold him off!", you spoke quickly but still comprehensible enough.

"But mama-"

"No buts! Listen to you're mother!"

" Here kitty kitty! Where are you? Just a nibble wouldn't hurt?!"

" GO! ALLONS-Y!"

Both you and you're children dashed off to opposite directions.  Not looking back to one another.

-With the kittens-


" Claude! You pumpis fool! We're lost!", yelled René.
" silence! We're not lost , I'm just having trouble smelling this water is making hard to do!",he argued.

As the two brothers try to smell the 3 scents you told them to find. Joliee and Angel were under an opening of a tree, trying to keep little Finnian warm.

10 minutes of sniffing the moist air, the boys gave up home till...

" I found it!", cheered Claude." Follow me!". All of them followed as fast as they could. Stopping at enormous white mansion, lights were on, and they were voices. " Oi! Amigos the churros are done!", a Spanish accent," did you bake those vith**** my vurst*****?!", a German accent, " Spain! That's the 10th batch you made!!", and a French accent.

-With you -

You layed on thr cold road, tired from trying you're best to dodge his bites, so far he has bitten you're stomach and you're right paw. But it seem that you left more damage on him. His back left leg was practically furless and you left 2 deep scratches on his snout.

" I underestimated you fräulein, you did quite a number on me...but I can still fight!", as he says that, he runs toward despite his leg. But before he could get half way near you, he tripped and slide till he reached you. The impacted left the German sheltered unconscious. While it made you sore because his body clashed with yours.
"Gah!", you coughed up tiny drops of blood. You scooted away from the German shepherd.
You took all the energy you had left and limped away from the knocked out dog.

To be continued...

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*-youre oldest son knows some french
**- 2p!Dog!Germany makes an appearence!
***- Hmmm~ I wonder who usally smells like this XD
****-"vith" is with
*****-"vurst" is wurst
Part 2: [link]



~EDIT~Whoa! I didn't think my first reader insert would be so popular?! Thanks for the WATCHES,FAVES and FEEDBACK!
Keep commenting and I'll update sooner! ;D


First time.writing a reader insert.No rude comments. don't waste youre time.

If there are any mistakes. please. KINDLY point them out and I'll fix them

Picture found on google.
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:iconmorgtw:
MorgTW Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Wait......that dog was 2P!Germany!?......no wonder
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impopulargirl9 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Lol i learn french in my school and so far, im the highest for the girls..
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canadatheninja Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
ALLONS-Y!!!!! *-* ze DOCTOR XD Allons-y is french for Lets Go! Right X3 I forget... loved the story

I laughed when you introduced 2p!dog!Germany as a disturbed german Shepard XD
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chibidragongirl Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Student General Artist
ALLONS-Y ALONZO! 
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AkasunaYuki3 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013
U said disturbed .. I thought of Prussia :iconlookofdisapprovalplz:
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Mia-jones Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
>\\\\< have to say love the stoty but thr picture is sooooooo f.cking adorable ;///v///;
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:iconartisan-garden:
Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Lol :)
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AuriaPerionBezarius Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Margh Doctor Who reference~~ :D
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lilmissunshine92 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
Yes! I'm not the only one who caught it! *extremely british accent* Allons-y!
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:iconartisan-garden:
Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I've never seen doctor who!!
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AuriaPerionBezarius Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Ohwow really?You could've fooled me!
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Always-the-hero Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You said you're not good with English , is it your second lauange ? Good story btw ~🇺🇸
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Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Yes and no. and thank you
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Always-the-hero Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
What's the other lauange ? If you don't mind my asking of course ~🇺🇸
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Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Spanish
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Always-the-hero Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thats cool ! ~🇺🇸
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Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Student Digital Artist
:D
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Azu-nyan136 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
:D
Such a good story,but your icon...
FIOLEE FTW!!
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:iconartisan-garden:
Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thank you :)
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VillainKomandr Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Hello there! Your sotory was very cute! If I may, I wish to help by pointing out some grammatical/spelling errors. For starters in the author's note you should phrase it "I do not do well in English..." instead of "I'm not well in English." Then when you are referring to the kittens it would be "... Her litter of five kittens."Aa litter, you see, is a group of young animals, so by saying that she has five litters would imply that she has had 15 or so kittens (average cat litter size is 3-5 kittens). When René is chastising Claud for getting them lost you misspelled Pompous (arrogance, or high regard for one's self). Near the end when the dog went unconscious, there might have been a auto correct error by putting Sheltered instead of Shepard.
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Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thanks for kindly pointing them out :D
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VillainKomandr Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Your welcome. I just wanted to be helpful. Also after finishing both parts two an three, I must congratulate you on making such a sweet story. The same author's note correction still stands though for both two and three (and the whole sheltered/shepard thing in part 2).
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Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I see . Thank you very much! ;)
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VillainKomandr Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Your welcome. :)
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American-Mutt Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Super adorable! Love the suspense! You NEED to continue this! You're doing fantastic! :D
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Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Really you think so? Thank you! :iconletmehugyouplz:
I did upload part 2 &3 but I don't know if I should continue?
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American-Mutt Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
You should totally continue it! It's a fantastic story and all of the comments prove it! And if you enjoy writing it you should totally continue! :D
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Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student Digital Artist
When school isn't in the way I will thank for taking time to read :)
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MezzanotteMarionette Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
One mistake I noticed in grammar. You're is not a possession of a person. It's simply "You are." Most of the "You're"s should be replaced with "your."

Your is as in
Your cat has fleas, please give her a bath!

You're is as in
You're failing math class, please see me after school.

Hope it helped.
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Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thank you!
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MoMoOverholt Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Student General Artist
Do I detect a Doctor Who reference ? O: <3
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OCTransylvaniaRP Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
Nice to see I wasn't the only one who read "ALLONS-Y!" In David Tennant's! "Allons-y, Alonso!"
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MoMoOverholt Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Student General Artist
Ouiii ~
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aibi0608 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Student
and i just proof my sister's point : i like cats and that's a problem

i get crazy bout cats , always get excited everytime i see a cute cat like greece
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Eclipse2warriorcats Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
must love this story....must hugtens...must-~and it gos on and on and on~

dude awesome story bro
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Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thank you! :)
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Eclipse2warriorcats Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
Your welcome ^^
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Akatsuki-Wolfz Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
oAo awsome
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Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thanks :)
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AndromSerket Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
:iconamericawhyplz: POOR FINNIAN!!! :iconmoarplz:
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jtangker Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
:iconmoarrplz: This was awesome please have the next chapter up soon please!
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jtangker Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
:iconmoarplz: *
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Luckysee12 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
;A; write more please
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crystalbunni12 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012
:icongrabbyhands: Moar.
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Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Student Digital Artist
maybe ;)
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crystalbunni12 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
No. No maybe.
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Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
It will be updated this upcoming Saturday :)
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Banshee-Scream Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yay!! :D
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Artisan-Garden Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thanks for helping me :D
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Banshee-Scream Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
your welcome :)
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